Hunua ranges is the best place I went to in the holidays. My dad bought some food from an indian shop and it smelt pretty good. Once we finally arrived at the picnic grounds I quickly got out of the car feeling free cause believe me the ride was awful and bumpy. We knew the place very well cause it was the 11th time we have been there.
So me and my brother Adam jumped across the small river but Adam was wearing heeled shoes so I had to help him but he managed it. Guess what we found, well we found a blueberry bush. We left from the place quickly cause my dad was calling us to come and eat, and when we got back, there was a pleasant site. We were eating chicken tandoori and plus it was a fine day.
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Hey Mosa,
ReplyDeleteThe Hunua ranges are a beautiful place to go for a picnic, as are a lot of places around New Zealand :) I hope the food was as good as it smelt and that you managed to get some of those berries for desert :p
I think your scentences are a good length and read well but you could look at filling your ideas out by telling more of the story, did you have trouble getting across the river on the way back or how did the water look.
Whatever goals you set I'm looking forward to seeing you achieve them.
Keep it up :)
Mr. Hutchings
Hi Mosa,
ReplyDeleteI loved your story about trip to hunua ranges. Well your lucky because you found a blueberry bush. Its a lovely place because I've been there. I swam at the hunua fall. It was fun.
Keep up the good work